【格律体新诗英译】王端成《望月寄远》/任雨玲英译

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【格律体新诗英译】王端成《望月寄远》/任雨玲英译
■望月寄远

     王端成
  
你在那边望月
倚窗独自吟哦
把月读成诗句
原来月亮是我
  
我在这边望月
不慎掉进梦里
把月化作诗句
原来月亮是你

Watching the Moon and Mailing Afar

By Wang Duan Cheng

You are watching the moon there,
Leaning on the window and reciting poems,
As if the moon changes into poetic lines.
Originally, the moon is me.

I am watching the moon here,
Carelessly, I am falling into my dreams.
I have changed the moon into poetic lines.
Originally, the moon is you.

（ Tr. Angela Ren,Proofread by William Wang，（美）X.L.WOO译校 ）

过河兵

越是明白如话，越是大众化。越是大众化，越是能流传久远。

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过河兵 发表于 2011-2-10 22:11
越是明白如话，越是大众化。越是大众化，越是能流传久远。

是的，适合大众口味

李牧云

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好像有些胡适的影子

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李牧云 发表于 2011-3-29 21:46
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好像有些胡适的影子

是的，王端成老师的此作确实韵味无穷

李牧云

呵呵，我是说您和过站的评论

曲径通幽

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谢谢牧云兄

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Watching the Moon and Mailing Afar

By Wang Duan Cheng

You are watching the moon there,
Leaning on the window and reciting poems,
As if the moon changes into poetic lines.
Originally, the moon is me.

I am watching the moon here,
Carelessly, I am falling into my dreams.
I have changed the moon into poetic lines.
Originally, the moon is you.

（ Tr. Angela Ren,Proofread by William Wang，（美）X.L.WOO译校 ）

曲径通幽

增加了诗意与韵律节奏的修改，已经编辑进主贴。